Lily's head lay heavily on my lap. I brushed wandering strands of hair back from her porcelain temples and untangled them from her long black eyelashes...
You took us inside the mind of a remorseless killer. This passage epitomized his soullessness: "...but the bank was too steep and I found that at the last, I had no desire to get my boots wet, so I rolled her down to the water’s edge." Well done, Tom.
A slow, creeping, disturbing revelation of madness. It did not surprise me she was dead. Tension was built from the very first sentence. I WAS surprised, however, by the chills I got as he rolled her into the water. Mission accomplished, Tom.
You took us inside the mind of a remorseless killer. This passage epitomized his soullessness: "...but the bank was too steep and I found that at the last, I had no desire to get my boots wet, so I rolled her down to the water’s edge." Well done, Tom.
A slow, creeping, disturbing revelation of madness. It did not surprise me she was dead. Tension was built from the very first sentence. I WAS surprised, however, by the chills I got as he rolled her into the water. Mission accomplished, Tom.
You did a great job of subtly leading us to this satisfying end. Just enough clues.